六年級英語作文及點評：I Love My Family

 　　I Love My Family

　　Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.

　　My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane. I love my family.

　　【要領點評】

　　一個平凡的題材，一篇生動的作文。這樣的命題，我們可能面對幾次，甚至幾十次了。但這位小朋友的筆端很是靈巧，了了數(shù)言，讓一個幸福的家庭躍然紙上，很值得我們去思考，我們能做到嗎?

　　小朋友的這篇作文除了語言優(yōu)美之外，在結構上也有閃光之處。先總說，將自己的家人逐個介紹一遍，后分說，把家人的工作、上班方式，愛好一一細說。 后以一句話進行概括，起到點題的作用。我們在寫類似的作文的時候是不是也可以借鑒呢？